wonderland

Well, that was pretty awesome! it played with my imagination. it was like threads of magic spinning around me, which was cool. Your flow is pretty, and it adds to ...

Your beginning was spot on! I've always heard that your want your beginning perfect if you want to get published, so that the agents and editors will want to read. ...

You really are telling us, instead of showing us. Give us more detail, more emotion. Without it, your peice will be lonely and empty. Your MC, seems flat and 2d. ...

Hey! Um, so you are missing some commas. Just read back, and find the places where you take natural breaks. I really like your style of writing, though i think ...

Well, that really hits hard with me. Very well written and it seemed to me somewhat of a daydream. I found this poem exceptional, with a wonderful message at the ...

Very depressing ending! But it was very sweet and very romantic, so goo work on that. Your flow was good, too. ~WickedWOnder

Thanks for the reviews, guys! I have another chapter to post, once review day is up!!

That was very interesting, but i feel you one question unanswered, which is why!? You give lovely description, but there was never an exact reason as to why the devil ...

Wow You are simply an amazing poet. Your imagery was strong and beautiful, and I really didn't feel like this was just a poem. I found it a wickedly wonderful ...

Well, that was the definition of a cliff hanger. I liked your descriptions at the beginning, that was strong and beautiful. I'm also eager to find out what happens next. ...

This was very, very good. Your MC was outstanding. Her voice was strong, and you can really tell she loved her husband a lot. This was a very well-written piece. ...

You rhyme! That is so enviable! Your poem was very, very good, The only thing i'd suggest doing would be to break it up, so the reader gets a chance ...

That was kinda of adorable in a weird way. I totally agree with Elinor Brynn. You could add so much more and make this poem more amazing then it already ...

Alright, so, your style of writing is sort of confusing. The way you write in first person, yet have other peoples thoughts. Thank you for explaining that. Now onto your ...

Okay, Truthfully, I haven't read the other 12 parts. but I'll get to that. I promise! Now, i can't say anything plot wise, because I haven't a clue whats going ...