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You came so far from a burning building, stars in your eyes you don't know where to go We ran past every single sign telling us to slow down We ...

Bay | Ballroom The banners were up; tables filled with Bay and Jon’s favorite treats lined the outer walls. The space was cleared for dancing, flirting and talking, yet Bay ...

Plot here!

Name: Beatrice (Bay) Age: 17 Gender: Female Appearance: Bay has large blue eyes, and wild, curly out of control brown hair. She's slim and pale, with a large, wide smile. ...

b4sv085642lbg look at that musical bar.

Alright, so, this was difficult to read, and I realized I couldn't. This is because you need to take that huge block of words you have and separate it into ...

I try to write at least a poem on my bus.

Kat | Soldiers Camp Kat pulled her favorite dagger from her thigh sheath, careful not to let it glint in the dim firelight. She could see her target from here. ...

Alleria. A usually 'peaceful' country, but at war with it's rival country, Latoria. Alleria has fallen onto hard times. The poor have become poorer, and everywhere you look, there is ...

Kat-Watching the Soldiers Camp Kat shivered. She was lying on her stomach, trying to pick out Domonic Valquarez from the soldiers below. She could remember the description given, light blonde ...

Name: Katia (Kat) Age: 20 Gender: Female Race: human Rank Assassin Allegiance: Herself, Tsila’s Den Appearance: Kat is five foot four inches, with bright red shoulder lenght hair that is ...

Alright, so, that was a good start, and I'm interested to see where you're going to go with it. To me, tough, it felt kind of short, and there was ...

Alright, so, This was a god beginning. I can see your characters starting to form. I found it, however, too choppy, with missing background and that raised questions for me, ...

1 The basement. It was something she had almost come to love, her little cot in the damp, musky basement. Sure, during the long winter nights she shivered, and through ...

Alright, so, this is short. Give it length; give us background on the character and the story. It's too short to get into, and there really is no premise. Make ...