wonderland

For just being amazing!

That was seriously great. I always loved flash-fiction, and you do it very well. You've captured everything perfectly, with an amazing ending. Your spelling and grammar are perfect, same with ...

The only thing I knew at that moment was to get away, 'cause Please, use the full words. Short form like that only works with speech they wanted me, bad. ...

Nitpicks I got down stairs and got my backpack. We all put on our shoes. Once I opened the door cold air hit my face making it cooler. We hopped ...

THat was very straight forward and blunt, but you could have dwindled around and put some emotion in. But, I totally get what your going for, and I also feel ...

Yay! Hurrah! I love it so much! (And the fact that I can sing it to the tune rocks my socks! Write On ~WickedWonder

The Alice costume The second one Oh, me! No offense ment. I just wanna to the Devil thing this year. it's actually a joke

Werewolves? Although i loved the twist, and the fact that you brought in the fantasy element this far in, you have to make sure it flows correctly, now it just ...

Uh, this is a script. Like, I mean an actual script. Which is always cool. ~WickedWonder

Alright, so, I really loved your beginning! It had everything, little descriptions to set the mood, then the accident that set everything off. Amazing. The only thing I'd suggest is ...

Alright so, Vampires? Really? Unless, they aren't vampires. You should make the race clear. As for your piece, there isn't much the review. It's just some background information, giving me ...

That was slightly confusing. You can actually slow down, and describe more. Your description was great at the begging, but somehow got lost later on, leading to my confusion. Really, ...

Is the boy Jonah or someone else? THat was sort of confusing, didn't really make much sense. I'd suggestest maybe slowing down, adding more detail and emotion To, be honest, ...

Alright, so I never did the whole welcome mat thing when i joined, three weeks ago, so a few facts ~I am a black girl! I posted a picture of ...

Alright, I think this actually pretty good. Like it if you, well, like it. It wasn’t what you were looking for. If you couldn’t find it then you should just ...