wonderland

Everyday I think of you I can’t see you, I can’t spend my time with you Everyday I wonder if are you are wondering about me, As I wonder about ...

Yes! Post those covers! I made mine on Picnik! faerieskiss.jpg

I've actually planned for this!!

I got ten.

So, this is the edited version? Anyway, It's coming along. Our house is awesome! It is a huge, old, stone house and has lots of land in the back and ...

And? That was much too short. Add details, add emotion. The reader wants to feel a strong connection to your MC, and right now, thats not happening. Spice it up ...

nine done!

Im going to tell you now that I didn't read the first chapter. Anyway, this chapter was very 'do-this-do-that' add some detail, describe the setting, and add emotion. Emotion is ...

And? To be fully honest, this just seemed like one of those chapters you write when you have writers block-which is to say empty and pointless. It's one of those ...

Alright, so, this is probably going to be a shorter one, because everyone has covered everything else. If I could have gone into my heart that night, I would have ...

Im going to say this now. You have too much dialogue, not enough description and details. You need to find the perfect balance between the two, don't go too overboard ...

I'm gonna say this again. You really need to add description. Right now you just have some dialogue, and thats not enough the keep a reader entertained. You need to ...

I think you have too much dialogue and not enough description. Reading that, I just felt confused, and sort of lost. What you should do is slow it down, really ...

Alright, it was short, but, in some places, quite confusing. This may be because you have too much going on at once. Rushing upstairs , she heard faint knocking coming ...

I've done two so far, so ILl try to get in a few more.