wonderland

Alright, so, I agree with the reviewer before me. This was very simple, and I didn't really like that. You use lines like this. Then I fell asleep. That told ...

Alright, so, this has potential. THe main this is, the mood of they day didn't seem to fit the story. The beautiful day almost seemed ironic. Mocking, even. It was ...

Name: Rhoswen Arabella (Rhos, Rhoswen) Age: 16 Gender: F Appearance (description and pic, if possible): her hair is long and blonde. (I mean super long. So long it curls around ...

So, Character sheets will be posted here, and we'll talk and do related things. Cinderella~ -Retrodisco666 Evil Step Sister~ Evil Witch 1 (Cinderella’s stepmother)~ Kayleigh Byrne-wickedwonder Rapun

Plot- In the country of Meldora, all the classic fairytales characters come alive. There is a young girl in her tower, with the evil witch keeping her company. A girl ...

Basic outline. and I mean basic In the country of Meldora, all the classic fairytales come alive. There is a young girl in her tower, with the evil witch keeping ...

ALright, so, I loved your beginning. To fight is to not. To not let your opponent to see your emotions, to not let them anticipate your next move. To not ...

I'd die. What if you had to preform in front of a trillion people?

I joined on September 5, 2010. now, a few months later, this place is quite literally my safe place. I honestly love that I can log on and talk *Complain* ...

Alright, so, the first chapter of my new novel. Even The Beautiful Lose Control Honestly, what do you think? I'm not exactly sure where it's going, but it's gonna be ...

Name: Rhoswen Aurbor (Rhos) Age(Over 20 for all Protectoribus): 25 Gender: f Group: Mage Apperance(Written and a picture. I'm asking for anime/cartoon pictures because it's easier to find those types ...

beautiful.jpg 1 My heart raced as I looked out the window of the old, decrypt Toyota Camry. My social worker, Mr. Wheeler, drove, calmly through the streets of New York ...

Alright, so, that was interesting. You tell the reader, a lot. Try to show the reader, instead of telling. Also, if you're going to do multiple POV's per chapter, you're ...

Alright, so, you tell too much.The whole chapter, you just fed the reader desctiption. Give detail, not description. Paint the scene using words, and let the reader use their imagination. ...

Alright, so, I liked it. Yes, it was interesting. One thing, and this will be a rant. “Did it work?” Drake asked eagerly. That was your beginning. That beginning didn't ...