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Alright, so, you're writing style was interesting. You don't give nearly enough detail, description or emotion, though, and it makes this piece kind of lack. Add description to make the ...

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Name: Kaede Age(Over 20 for all Protectoribus): 26 Gender: F Appearance(Written and a picture. I'm asking for anime/cartoon pictures because it's easier to find those types for this type of ...

Rhos sat by the window in her tower, looking out. She could feel the cold, cool air over her face and hands. She wondered, not for the first time, what ...

Name: Kayleigh Byrne Age: 50-something Gender: F Appearance (description and pic, if possible): Her hair is long and black, her skin eerily pale. She stands at about five four, and ...

Okay, i just got this today, and it's beast! I love it! (Yes, It's a dinosaur lunch kit. Who Doesn't want one?) Photo 274.jpg

We can double it up! I want a witch! Thats it! Go nuts!

1 I open my eyes slowly, very slowly. That night is almost two years ago, when I was fifteen. I can still remember every detail, the wild look in his ...

Alright, so, I have one technical thing with this. Okay, A) “Snow,” Helena said, tugging back on her reigns. “Go!” In horse back riding, tugging on the reigns is a ...

THanks guys. I decided not to enter, anyway, so although I love the advice, you critiques aren't needed at the moment. Locking. Thanks though!

Alright, so, I'm going to approach another cliche I see here. THe rich, mary-sue-istic Vampire cliche. Why? Although you don't outrightly say that she/her family is rich, I can see ...

Name: Serena Age: 17 Gender: Female Affiliation: Black Quote: 'Yeah? Thats what you say.' Themes Song: Push-Marianas Trench Appearance: Long, fair blonde hair, and huge blue eyes. Her skin is ...

This is my latest latest project. I thought of it, but not really, so it's gonna be a mess until I get a plot. Prologue I really hate running. It ...

Alright, so, I found this a work in progress. you need to give us more of a back story. What happened? Why did this happen? What is your main characters ...

Alright, so, you don't have nearly enough description. Too much dialogue, but not enough description. Honestly, because of that, I skimmed about three quarters of this work. "Yes." She exsposed ...