wonderland

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I love Sherlock Holmes. I don't know how to feel about this. My mind is all confused. This is scary and exciting.

It's been a bit. A long bit since I've Written posted a song. As soon as I can, I'll upload this on youtube. It has a punky, edgy feel, and ...

this was a very....wow...of a news post. Seriously, I honestly just learned there's a news section. Awesome!

Alright, so, well, then. I'll do this verse by verse. Your first verse made no sense. Why are you using language used back in Shakesperian times? Was that supposed to ...

Alright, so, I couldn't get over the first two paragraphs. Twin full moons shone down brightly on the palace. In the moonlight one could see every detail, the rough stone ...

Alright so, hello, dialogue. Way too much. There was way too much dialogue and minimal everything else. A story isn't just talking, it's also details and emotion, majorly emotion. If ...

It was always the same, at least for Rose. The same mist around her, and she knew she was dreaming. She could her the click of her high heels as ...

Alright, so, good start to a beginning. You give a good setting and scene, but in whole your MCs reaction seems totally fake. She wouldn't just curse, she'd probably cry ...

ALright, so, it's a good beginning, albeit simple. You could expand here a bit, I think, give some background. Right now, your premise seems a little bit random. Well written, ...

I feel really young here! I really loved the August 2007 setup!

6/10 Hmm, interesting.

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I am still the mistress of paraphrasing, and this fact will not change. This spoiler shall contain a one to two-sentence summary of each chapter so far Chapter 1-We are ...

Alright, so, this is a prologue, yes. I tend to dislike prologues, unless it's absolutely necessary for your story. This one just struck me as bland and cliche, espically with ...