wonderland

Alright, so, I only read about a quarter of this to learn it was the exact same as the first chapter. There was minimal details, no emotion, and way too ...

Alright, so, This was actually well written. I enjoyed it. It made me smile, then ending, becuase it was optimistic, but not in a totally happy/fake optimistic way. It seems ...

Just quickly, those crappy lyrics are only there because I wanted to see how the lyrics would fit before I wrote the song, something I can't do until next month.

Alright, so, I'm a little torn as to wether to like this poem or not. One one hand, it's simple, and I'm not much for simple poetry. I always want ...

Alright, so, this was all just telling the reader. You gave the reader mass amounts of details, without really backing them up, or giving emotion. Pieces like that can get ...

That is just chilling. I like how you put the skull in the wisps of smoke-made my stomach flip. Now, I'm not a technological whiz-so I can't tell you how ...

Alright, so, to me, this was just monotonous. I couldn't feel the emotion, and the ending left me no will to go on. I do realize that this supposed to ...

Alright, so, Vasticity brings up a good point, and I fully agree with him. However, I'm going to touch up on something else-your imagery and emotions need work. Imagery is ...

Alright so, I only read half of this. It didn't grab my attention in a special way, and it was just a rant towards depression in a constant flow, I ...

Alright, so, I'll say this-that was very well written-a piece that played with the imagination and the readers emotions. Although I have to admit that I don't like prologues, this ...

Alright, so, I didn't get much of an impression from this chapter. All her movements seemed posed, like you planned way too much for the chapter. Loosen up a bit, ...

Alright, so, first off, I honestly couldn't stand your first sentence. It was horridly cliche, and really, not grabbing It was a dark and stormy night, the wind blowing hard ...

Ahaha, yup. Totally rewritten. Enjoy! (Oh, and the whole Lalalala, Blahblahblahblah, Singsingsing, Sing a random song thing? intentional. 1 When we had talked for the first time, I had been ...

I'll try to get to 300 reviews, hopefully over.

Not one shot, but to. This first one I edited to look like a 1960's movie shot. I'll have to do it with my model friend, who actually suits the ...