wingsofaphoenix

Wow. I'm absolutely blown away. I really enjoyed this poem for a number of reasons. I love how you combined realistic things that have the potential to be boring, with ...

I don’t like lumpy custard. Ice blocks should be frozen, soup should be hot and red and pink should never be worn together. There are definitely some things in this ...

I really liked the lyrics and the mood they set- two lovers protecting each other through the 'bitch' that is life. The thing I like most is the chorus because ...

I enjoyed this poem a lot and could connect to it immensely. I enjoyed that the questions you asked got more and more intense but never melodramatic and you stayed ...

I really like the images that you painted here. I was able to see very clearly what was happening and was really drawn in by the poem which is fantastic. ...

Thanks, you two, for the great constructive feedback! I edited it a bit and will keep working on it, obviously that was just a rough draft. I really appreciate you ...

for me, life is my happiness at least that's what I said, when I got asked to say something in French it was easy because it wasn't my own language, ...

I love the purity in this and found that it flowed beautifully! It seemed like it came right from your heart and was completely genuine.

I really like how you used questions in this- it adds to the mood of frustration. However, maybe you could put some more statements in there instead of just questions ...

I found this poem easy to read in some ways, but I didn't find it very satisfying. It was a bit too repetitive which could be fixed by changing the ...

A heavy heartbeat of horror Test tubes clattering, clashing Tumbling, spitting, spurting Rainbow juice leeching Kissing the tips of my toes Bare feet exposed to other-worldy chemistry Ribbons of gas ...

My name is L Phoenix. I am 15 years old. I am writing this from a hospital bed. I'm being fed by a tube and my best friend is painting ...

I really liked all of these stanzas. I felt they conveyed a real feeling of being at peace. I especially liked the last stanza as it relates two things that ...

I really really enjoyed reading this because I could connect to the poem and was drawn in by your words. I found the mixture of emotion and physical action satisfying. ...

I think for what you were trying to portray, you made the mood a bit too jolly. I don't like the last line, either, because it's too 'in your face' ...