wildnaturespirit

I agree some of it seems really short and fast, like parts to a really short story. If this is going to be longer than perhaps more emotion and thought ...

Again very good. I like the nightmare. One thing that jumped at me other than the nothing moved, which has already been discussed was: "He was staring into the dark ...

Whoa! That was a huge jump. I kind of wondered what was going on at first but then it clicked. when you talked about the clouds racing from horizon to ...

Wow. I like the style of it. I really want to read more! The one thing that I didn't really understand was the line: "He was aware." I didn't really ...

Prologue The wolves howled from the wooded depths of the Terracordula Mountains, as a circle of strange creatures began to gather. In the middle, a raven with a menacing beak ...

Wow, I thought this was really good. I can't wait to see where it goes. But some of the behaviors seemed a little... unwolfish. To make your wolves more convincing ...

My rat is named Freckle. She is a real sweetie. She loves giving rat kisses, she is such a people rat. What color is your rat? Freckle has a black ...

This really grabbed me. It makes a good start. Pulling readers into the story with a mysterious begining can really make the difference. I am eager to read more. But ...

So... Hi, I'm Wildnaturespirit. Or WNS whenever I don't feel like typing. So, I'm not the average high school student. And it seems modern high school is designed totally for ...