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I like your story, one of my favourite bits was about the father who said joining the army would teach him discipline, he's like the grumpy old guy saying " ...

Well Done. That was a great piece of work, one of my favourite bits of it was when you said how the three dogs teeth snapped inches away from Hermione's ...

First off I think this a great start which will develop into and exciting story, when you telling us about how she was loosing control of her horse, try to ...

Hi firstly that was good because you knew you couldn't go into huge amounts of detail, and you got it spot on you didn't rush through it saying " she ...

NEARLY AN EARLY TEA At last it's Sunday, The holy day, But it's also cricket day, Our skipper sets out to do the toss, And returns victorious, We decided to ...

TAKE COVER!! What would you do if you got attacked by a lion.

Our story begins in a far away land, on the surface this world looks calm and peaceful but looks can be deceiving .for this world has had a bloody and ...

Zimbabwe my home, For we may be separated, But I will all ways remember you, The Accasia tree in the garden, The blood red roses, John my friend I miss ...

OK first off I think you had some fantastic dialogue there that really brought the characters to life. Secondly I was wondering in the first few lines I saw [ ...

Hi there I like the way your poem makes the reader think about why our heart beats, the line Like a forest, thick as night it creates a picture for ...

Fantastic I like your story because of the way the character is narrating the story which helps me to know what the character is like, what phrases they use in ...

I call out to the people beside me, My voice is drowned out by the boats engine, Bullets whistle past, I am scared, I try to hide it but it ...

The darkness catches my eye, Its cold grip pulls me into the dark void, The complete absents of sound makes me feel as if I am a deaf old man ...

Hi This was a great story, I couldnt find any grammar or spelling mistakes I especialy like Riley, you dont see many books that have animals such as dogs being ...

I would just like to say thank you to the community and makers of yws. I believe that i am not alone in saying that the community OF YWS always ...