wellmanwriter

Well, after I posted that I realized there were two parts preceding it, so I suppose I may have to retract some statements after reading those...

Okay. So, I liked it, generally, at first. After a while it was a little too reminiscent of that movie The Ring- "you will die in seven days"- but I'll ...

The old man at the gas station plucked a shaft of the long grass that grew from spaces between the concrete slabs and slid it into one of the spaces ...

It'd help if you explained a little more about what's going on. I have no idea what the line of fire is- but apparently it's important since it's the title.

married at 13?!? ouch! =] well, i really liked it. there were a couple of places, like here: Maybe if you actually tried to write your essay, you will do ...

tick tick tick the clock upon the mantle sounds magnified to me all else is silent. not a knock, or a footstep, or a ring. i moved the phone away ...

the bags beneath my eyes fill up with tears, though none fall they are oceans of sorrow, hidden, only seen by others as shadows, remnants of the weariness and agony ...

The thing about this is, it's the prologue. I purposely didn't go too much into the characters because this is just meant to be a little background on the story. ...

that was deep. =]

I think it's really powerful to deliver an emotional piece like this in such a sarcastic and almost emotionless way. i did have to reread in a couple of places ...

Alright, so I took into account some of the advice given to me the last time I posted this. Hopefully the characters now are a little more accessible. I also ...

We had the world, you and I. It was ours, our very own, and we did with it what we wanted. When our friends moved away, we didn’t mind; they ...

It thought it was good- well-written and insightful. But no one ever walks. I liked that you took a kind of cliche term and made it your own. The only ...

...Really? I think it was just a random name I chose without looking it up or anything, though I don't remember for sure. Ha! haha, that's awesome. it totally fits ...

I'm going to assume you know that Erebus is a word from Greek mythology meaning death, and say congratulations on a great allusion =] You gotta love seeing authors use ...