weekend_warrior

Very Interesting. Feedback Questions: 1. Do you think it's to short/quick? 2. What do you think of the description? Do I need more? 3. Would you read chapter 1 when ...

I can accept your criticism as far as the Forgotten Realms world goes. Elminster could be construed as a mary sue of Ed Greenwood. However, Cormyr 1765 is written during ...

A Good start, I can tell you have the story planned within your head, and your grasp of the overall storyboard is good. However, I would work on the delivery. ...

A capital start. I like how you used “lest I claim you in sport.” Good wording for the time period you are trying to write in. I would describe Seridon ...

Cormyr 1765: A Story The Waning Hero Part I DA 1480 Sorina, the Field Marshall of Cormyr, forsook her sword for bow and knocked an arrow within the sinewy bowstring. ...

The Sharpe series by Bernard Cornwell. The Horatio Hornblower series by C.S. Forrester The Red Badge of Courage by Stephen Crane A Conneticut Yankee in King Arthur's Court by Samuel ...

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I'm currently serving in the United States Army, and go to Iraq this month. How have we become like our enemies? -have we started deliberately targeting civilians? -have we started ...

I have served in the US Army for almost four years now and I would like to offer some constructive criticsm that will make your story more realistic. Unfortunately, I ...

This is an intro to a series I am considering writing that takes place in a semi-custom world that I creaded. It takes Lee Greenwood's Forgotten Realms and advances the ...

Me at military ball.

I like your story concept about duty and honor, as well as your decision to convey the sorrow of leaving home with the military. Allow me to point out a ...

I like it. I might add some more description around the dialogue; it would help it flow better.