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victorydance

  • Lyric Poetry Re: Stand Up

    I liked your internal rhyme on line five. it added more to the poem and helped it flow better! You used a few near rhymes, which you totally pulled off. ...

    Jun 6, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Security

    nice! it flowed very well. It's got a very nice rhythm to it. I can tell exactly how you feel about God and it's always nice to know we all ...

    May 17, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Untitled

    My first attempt at a poem. Here you go, world. I break away from the monotony of apathy this moment of eradication of my feelings takes dedication; a hopeless mission ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Social Parasite

    hey, I care about you! I know where you're coming from though. everyone feels like this at one point. but you're not worthless or anything. Obviously you're pretty talented at ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Cold Anger

    I like your use of metaphors. I specifically like how you compared death to a stalker. although that may be slightly cliché, it's pretty accurate. We often don't know it's ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Teenage Emergency

    wow, that was pretty dark. It was written very well, though. I can also see this poem as song lyrics, too. Your words have a nice ring to them. They ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: A Poet's Land

    This was excellent! After first reading it, your poem kind of reminded me of the song Imagine by John Lennon. I really liked the lines "To compare to the verses/chisled ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Sincerely, Brain

    That was awesome! it's a new approach at expressing frustration. how DO we know what love is? If only we really could write a letter to our hearts from our ...

    May 4, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Beneath the Smile

    I really like this! I think everyone can relate to this at some point in their lives.

    May 2, 2011


You own everything that happened to you. Tell your stories. If people wanted you to write warmly about them, they should have behaved better.
— Anne Lamott