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The frolicking pony is very pretentious, so he always skipped around trees. When suddenly groundhogs pop

Peripheral. TQU Letters must not touch.

Whoa! This poem is so cool! I can tell you did a lot of research and spent a lot of time on this. Thumbs up!

Hey! I liked this version of the prologue a lot more than the first version. You really gave the guards a lot more character and background. PM me when you ...

Hey! I think you did an awesome job portraying the way the character thinks and feels. I didn't really see any grammar mistakes, but I think yiou could have put ...

Hello again! I like this piece a lot. It captures my imagination, and is very believable. It gets you excited, and makes you want to read more. There were just ...

Hey!!! This kept me hooked from the time I started to the time I ended. It was very descriptive, and the characters were well constructed. They had personality, and you ...

Hey! I thought this was really good! I could really relate to it. Great job. Jesus Loves You!

Hey, I haven't read your story yet, but I read the bottom of the title where you said you didn't know where you were going. Here's a tip. Before you ...

Dude, this is sweet! The line with the four leaf clover gave me chills. It was pretty sweet. Let me edit just a few things. This is the child that ...

Hi! I see the star! You did a great job here. Don't ignore that urge, but listen to it, and when you've written the poem edit it until it feels ...

Like the others said, this is like the framework for a great poem. You should add a little depth to this, and really mix your feelings in there. Tell how ...

This is pretty sweet. I don't think the color's bad at all. You probably could illustrate your own books, if you decide to wrrite one.

Dude that is so cool! It looks like the two moons in star wars onthe planet Tatooine! Sweet