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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: TFoA - Chapter 12

    Unpublishedperson here to review chapter 12! Lets just get the nitpicks out of the way first. I hate seeing Lydia so upset I thought this was maybe a bit too ...

    Oct 6, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: TFoA - Chapter 11

    First things first, I think it is good that you are dealing with Lydia's reaction to her blindness like this early on. Its better that you do this now that ...

    Oct 5, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: TFoA - Chapter 10

    Hey there, unpublishedperson here to review! I have been waiting for this one for a while, so thanks for publishing! Of course, it would be wonderful if you could keep ...

    Sep 29, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Wages: Chapter Nineteen

    Hey, unpublished here to review! This looks like a very interesting novel that I am sad I have not discovered previously, and I will be checking out previous chapters if ...

    Sep 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Health Re: Darkman's Hour: Prologue

    This was a intriguing opening, very brief but with a lot of subtext and information. This seemed like the type of prologue that has a lot of clue that will ...

    Sep 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Horror Re: Mars One: One small error of man, one giant failure for mankind - Chapter 1.1

    Hey there, unpublishedperson here to review! It has been a while since I have done anything on this website, so excuse my reviewing skills being a bit rusty and all. ...

    Sep 28, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: TFoA - Chapter 9

    Hey there, unpublishedperson here to review Chapter 9, where it looks like shit is getting real! Daniel thinks for a few seconds. “Yeah, you kind of do.” He says, nodding. ...

    Jul 31, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: TFoA - Chapter 8

    Hey there, unpublishedperson here to review, so sorry that I did not get to this sooner. So, for the most part a good chapter. It was nice to see Lydia ...

    Jul 30, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: TFoA - Chapter 7

    Hey there, unpublished person here to review! First, some nitpicks: just around the next curve I would like you to specify a bit more here maybe? like it seemed like ...

    Jul 22, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Fathers of Power Chapter 7: King

    Unpublishedperson here to review chapter 7! This will be the final chapter that I am reviewing for a while, I will be back from vacation in a few days and ...

    Jul 12, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Fathers of Power Chapter 6: Land of Magic

    Unpublishedperson here to review chapter 6! Boy, I sure am on a roll here with these reviews! Just this, and chapter 7, and then I will have 5-9 down! Then ...

    Jul 12, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: ​Fathers of Power Chapter 5: Mana and Swords

    Unpublishedperson here to review chapter 5, I will in order be doing 6 and 7, then do 1-4 if all goes according to plan. some of the army’s best of ...

    Jul 12, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Fathers of Power Chapter 8: Lyoko the Impossible (Part II)

    Ok, to review part 2 for continuity! So, nitpicks first. “Well there used to be a special class that I tough personally of about thirty students, but since… since the ...

    Jul 12, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Fathers of Power Chapter 8 (Part 1): Lyoko the Impossible

    Unpublishedperson here to review, sorry that I am basically going back in time here, but its just easy for me that way. (makes the task less daunting) So, lets start ...

    Jul 12, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Fathers of Power Chapter 9: Zakashi's Master (Part I)

    So I guess that I better review this part, now that I review Part 2! I was impressed by the opening of this chapter, even though I did not know ...

    Jul 12, 2014


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