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Re: A Rose's Bloody Kiss- ch. 1
I called her Rose. Rose for her soft red lips. Rose for her tall, slender, perfectly curved body. Rose for her delicate, silky skin. And rose for her thorns. These ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: What You Are, Boy.
This is good. Just one suggestion though, it's not necessary, but you could try following a more regular pattern so that the words flow off the tongue easier. Otherwise it ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: Crystal Clear - Prologue
This is really good. And to snoweary, I think amethystnight didn't mean she had to drink her own blood but that she had to drink the blood that was given ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: The Eyes That Forgive
Thanks picklesole and pettybage for commenting! I am very glad for your feedback and will try to use it. I probably won't continue with this story though, because like many ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: Glitch, Chapter 1
Good. Really good. Can't wait till next chapter. By the way, it's actually - pressing *two fingers *to the corners of her lips...
Nov 8, 2011 -
Re: The Eyes That Forgive
The Eyes That Forgive By Julia Sweeney My story is not a particularly interesting one. It’s not as though I’m insane, or sane for that matter, I just love the ...
Nov 8, 2011 -
Re: Demon- Prologue
I think it's really good. I didn't read the spoiler until I was almost halfway through but I got where you were going before that. Often my writing takes a ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: The (Really) Rough Road to Independence
I like it. Definitely better then the history textbook and it got the point across better. Non-fiction is not my thing at all but I think you could make a ...
Nov 7, 2011 -
Re: Under the Ground- Ch. 1
Awesome... totally creepy but really good, Raffi agrees. :D The way you described her mothers glee at Georgy seeing her was so creepy. I loved it. Does [i]hunger[i] mean something ...
Oct 4, 2011
