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Fixed, Lily. :)

OK, so I edited it. I wan wondering if any of you would reread it? You don't have to review or anything; I just want to know if it's better.

Thanks, for the reviews guys. :) They're great. I'll do another edit later tonight when I have more time. Skins, can I just say that you kind of freaked me ...

'Kay, so I edited it. Better?

Thanks, guys, for the reviews. In a minute I'm going off to fix it. Also, 'cause this is a WriMo, I wasn't as focused on the grammar, so that's why ...

Thanks for the review Skins. I know, I'm not that good at poetry. I just do one every once in a while when the mood strikes, and it's usually crap. ...

Thanks. :) I've never really done this kind of poetry before--not that I'm that good at any other kind--but I couldn't imagine this piece done as a short story, so ...

Yeah, sorry. About the adoption thing. I changed it so that this is her first real family, and that she's worried about her punishment instead of a new home. So.... ...

Thanks! :) As for the stanzas... I don't know, that's just how it turned out. It just sort of worked with my idea.

I think the American equivalent of an esky is a cooler. Anyways, that's what it sounds like.

Obviously I have a bunch of re-writing to do. Dex Reemer and Emily are two completely different people. Dex Reemer found out about Emily's life--as well as a few other ...

Thanks for the review Skins! :) Tenses and commmas... yeah, those are my downfalls. Thanks for pointing them out and I'll work on it. I'll edit this once I have ...

Thanks for the review! :) I really appreciate it! :) I know, I'm addicted to smilies! :)

Hi! Here to re-review as asked. :) OK, so, because it doesn't seem you've changed the main part so much, I'm going to focus on the prologue. 'Kay? Red = ...

I LOVE the Harry Potter references!! Plus, the Deathly Hallows is my favorite, followed by the Half-Blood Prince. hehe :P