ultraviolet

Hi there! ‘plink!’ I'm not entirely sure, but I'm fairly certain that you should take away the quotation marks and put "plink" in italics, to indicate it's a sound. What ...

Hey! Like the other's said, this pulled me in without my really even noticing. If you knew me you'd know that was no small feat, but you did it. But ...

Hey! Back again. So, this is probably my favorite of your chapters. They seem to get better every time. I don't really have any content things, and I'm not really ...

Here again. :) Okay, so in all actuality, this is pretty good. There's really only two things I've found to critique. One is, as Rascalover said, that this can get ...

I know you found the name, but just a thought. For names, there isn't necessarily a right or wrong spelling. However you spell it is how you spell it. Sure, ...

Here again (this time on the right thread). bit other children so hard they needed stitches , and more. I know the bolded part makes the previous part seem worse, ...

Hey, so, looking on your Chapter One thread, I see that the prologue is chapter one... so I'm kinda now assuming that this is your thread for all of your ...

I don't quite get why you have multiple chapter up on here, since you have them in your novel folder. Really, it makes it look kind of ugly, and really ...

The pacing's definitely better. The ending feels like an ending, not like there's still supposed to be more so you can explain it to us. And I disagree with Tabby ...

Like Dudette said, this isn't awful - actually, it's quite good. Okay, I know this is only part one, but it feels really short. Cut off. I'd consider making this ...

I am sad that I'd've did not make an appearance in this. Ditto. :3

Name: Beatrice Lemere (call her Bea) Age: 16 Gender: Female Personality: Bea is spontaneous, and she does spontaneous things, like spontaneously fight, do flips, slice things with her sword, use ...

This one's dedicated to Calligraphy. =3 Idiot; that is what you are. Don't deny it. Don't pretend that you are anything more than an idiot.

Hi! Here to review this little gem for you. Okay, so I was looking through the forums for something to review. I normally dislike romance, but clicked on this anyway ...

Temporarily closed due to amount of reviews due and busy schedule. Yeah, you read right. I will review a novel . A whole one. From ten chapters to sixty-eight. Don't ...