ultraviolet

Here to review, as requested. :) The strides he took from the stairwell to the master bedroom were unconsciously quick and silent. He paused his walking at the doorway whe ...

Is it in first person or third? If it's third, then you, the narrator, could comment on how she looks. But if it's first, I'd suggest not tampering with her ...

Hey! I know I said I'd review the last chapter first, but I started reading this, and thought I'd review it while it was fresh in my mind. Okay, so ...

Thanks for the post! I can't really get to this 'til at least Sunday (sorry, weekends are my busy time and my sister invited a bunch of friends over) but ...

For being the local fishy.

Novels, definitely. There's something about developing character and plot that I just can't find when doing anything else. Nothing else is worth countless hours spent doing it. (And no, I've ...

Hey! Overall, I love this. The writing's nice and the descriptions are good as well. I really like the POV, how she acts so naive and innocent, just following him, ...

For reminding me of shards of glass.

For always making me think of Ranger Hawk and TheNewHero (don't ask me why or how, but I always tend to group YWSers together, usually for no apparent reason).

*Of course I know which one you're talking about!* For founding one of the best Sbs, before it dwindled off.

For having published a book.

Hey there! Since this is really, really good, there are only a couple things I'm going to point out. And by worst sunburns, I mean we pretty much burst into ...

Hey! Here to review for you. (Since this is so long, I'll probably only end up stating the things that jumped out most to me, so sorry if this seems ...

--Begin with action - as long as you hook us and something is happening, we are willing to prolong our disbelief about the characters, the world, even the laws of ...

Whereas sargsauce spoke more on her and her mother, I'm going to focus a little more on her and John. Since you said John only kissed guys, I'm assuming he's ...