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Re: Hi! I'm reviewing things!
Maybe my short story? cheers!
Oct 26, 2018 -
Re: Worst movie you have ever seen
Manos: The Hands of Fate The Room Puma Man! Jack and Jill Samurai Cop
Aug 7, 2013 -
Re: Semi-conscious Reasoning (6. Teacher of the Year)
5 more chapters to go. Editing is killing me alive! Thank you so much for all of your feedback and support thus far. Every single comment helps me to improve! ...
Jan 26, 2012 -
Re: Semi-conscious Reasoning (5. Ends Unmet)
Getting my first draft completed! Something was amiss. Dan could conclude as much as he sat amongst the quiet of his room, having just seen a patient out. He wasn't ...
Jan 26, 2012 -
Re: Mama
Hello there! This was a nice short piece, clearly very dramatic! I liked the writing as well, but some bits don't come across as intended and could be fixed up ...
Nov 15, 2011 -
Re: What we all endure
Written for a speed contest with the topic "cereal" and although it's short I think it gets the point across. I'm getting too used to phone writing but whatever, enjoy! ...
Nov 11, 2011 -
Re: Limitless
A dystopian! I'm always interested in dystopian pieces. Your writing style has a lot of promise though there are issues here and there with, but first I'll give you my ...
Nov 11, 2011 -
Re: Semi-conscious Reasoning (4. The Ups and Downs of Assisting)
Thank you for all the reviews so far! I'm trying to take everything in so that improvement can be made. Please keep the reviews coming so that I know what ...
Nov 8, 2011 -
Re: Semi-conscious Reasoning (3. The Love of Your Life)
This thing actually has a plot? I know, I'm shocked too. Please do enjoy! It was about a week until Dan was to see his newest patient, and he ...
Oct 11, 2011 -
Re: Semi-conscious Reasoning (1. Dan)
I loved this work and the second one too. It was amazing and I really liked your character dan! He was exactly as you described him and I'm very glad ...
Oct 3, 2011 -
Re: JP's reviews.
viewtopic.php?t=88275 Hello! If you have the time, thanks!
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: (No name yet) Chapter One
Your tenses often switch around throughout, and it was difficult to read at times. It has promise, it just needs a solid edit. I've edited the first paragraph so you ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: Bring it on! (Open)
topic88275.html Hello there~ Reviews are very much appreciated!
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: An Amalgamation
I know little about poetry, so I can't really critique this. But I can give an overall review! I like the feeling that you've portrayed here. To me it feels ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: Go With the Flow
:o Aww, this was cute. It was nice to see that in the end the little event that changed our narrator so much was his father teaching him how to ...
Oct 1, 2011
