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Re: Five minute play.
I myself just recently wrote a play for a school function and it went horribly wrong. I appreciate your attempt. Its a nice script, nice story. Have nothing much to ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: The Autograph
Decided not to hide after all :P .. The story is nice .. Looking forward to more .. And welcome to YWS ! :D
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: soliloquy
Okay .. decided to follow you after all .. No point in hiding ! :P Anyway loved your poem .. And what more I understood it completely So didn't have ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: Courtly Love
Nice story .. But I felt it lacked the flow .. The concept is nice .. If you just write it in a more clutter free manner maybe it will ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: When I Died...
I didn't think much about the story seeing its length. But once I went through it I was blown away. You put so much thought, so many emotions in such ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: Dear Hanna
Nice story but I found it too short. Just when I was getting into the story it came to an abrupt end. Also though the story didn't have enough emotions, ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Chapter 2 (unknown title)
nice story ! A typical teenage drama .. I have read both the chapters and I liked how you made the MC's so different .. Your story is really good ...
Jul 17, 2011 -
Re: Creature of Night
Great poem ! Loved the words in it .. and it kept me hooked right till the end. Is it about a vampire ? (Forgive me for my twilight hangover ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: A Challenge
Nice story. I don't see any problems as such in your story .. But that is not saying much as my grammar sucks ! :P But I liked your characters ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: Dragons in the backyard
Loved your story. It was quite funny. I wanted to keep on reading more of it. Just one mistake I found .. He blushed. "You mean Andea? She's good. I ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: My Hero? Chapter 1
Nice story ! Maybe you should begin by writing about Rapunzel. Like she is reading the story and Deeda interrupts her. Like "He climbed up her long golden hair ...... ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: The Clock
A very good story. But I think it needs a little more work. For one thing, things get very confusing after a point. Once he starts running from those masked ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Hailing Heaven pt. 1
Loved your work ! I found your description of the colours beautiful. The starting para was just wonderful. But there are a lot of things I want to know .. ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: I Dared to Dream
Nice story. I will just begin with the one mistake I found in your story - Now he was had moved on with his life. I guess the 'was' was ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: Dear Mr. Rapist
Amazing ! Emotional ! Gripping ! Thrilling ! You are an amazing writer ! Hats Off to You ! You brought out all the emotions so well and kept me ...
Jun 27, 2011
