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Nice story. I don't see any problems as such in your story .. But that is not saying much as my grammar sucks ! :P But I liked your characters ...

Chapter 1 - (Un) Normal - ness ! ! The beeping alarm greeted Jinx in the morning. She woke up with no idea what the day had in store for ...

Loved your story. It was quite funny. I wanted to keep on reading more of it. Just one mistake I found .. He blushed. "You mean Andea? She's good. I ...

Nice story ! Maybe you should begin by writing about Rapunzel. Like she is reading the story and Deeda interrupts her. Like "He climbed up her long golden hair ...... ...

A very good story. But I think it needs a little more work. For one thing, things get very confusing after a point. Once he starts running from those masked ...

Loved your work ! I found your description of the colours beautiful. The starting para was just wonderful. But there are a lot of things I want to know .. ...

Wow ! Amazing ! I am not much of an artist but I can appreciate good art when I look at it. ;) Loved the whole thing. Keep it up ...

This story is for the Big Random Story Contest. My topic was - A soldier at a skyscraper spending money. I had always wanted to write a story around some ...

Nice story. I will just begin with the one mistake I found in your story - Now he was had moved on with his life. I guess the 'was' was ...

Amazing ! Emotional ! Gripping ! Thrilling ! You are an amazing writer ! Hats Off to You ! You brought out all the emotions so well and kept me ...

Didn't fully get your story but liked your language. Beautifully written. I think you should covert this story into a poem. The language is already 'poetic'. Gud job and Gud ...

Beautiful poem ! Short and sweet ! Keep up the good work ! :)

Hahaha ! ! Awesome ! :D It was really fun and funny ! Nice work. And you're right your characters don't need any names. They are perfect. I loved your ...

Interesting theme ! Amazing Creativity ! :D I found the descriptions in the first paragraph beautiful. The last paragraph could be given a look though. I did find some mistakes. ...

Am obsessed with fairies, vampires or any mythological character. So naturally I loved the theme. I think you should expand the story. Tell us how she became a mortal. I ...