trini_not_kat

Aww I really liked this story and I don't think it needs as much help as you might think :D My favorite was that it wasn't the typical story, you ...

Okay...sounds like the good beginning, the girl has come from a bad home and now it starting over with a (hopefully) fabulous new life! First off, you start off by ...

This is a good start, but I want to hear more of their backstory. How they met, or how she feels about him, what their relationship is like... I like ...

Well, I'd say you could definitely make this a longer story. At this point, the section you have now could either be the beginning or ending of a story. If ...

Whoa, you did a clear job of explaining what agony she was in and we've all been there. I think it would be helpful in get us (as the readers) ...

-Cry, the Beloved Country by Alan Paton -Passing by Nella Larson -Looking for Alaska by John Green I guess those are my top three.

A great first draft, but you have a few parts that need some tweaking. First, I had a little trouble picking up the scene at first, with Mia (and I ...

The ending actually surprised me in a funny way, so nice work! To make it even more believable and really get the reader invested in thinking that the kiss is ...

That...was...hilarous! I laughed at least three times out loud and especially when he called her selfish. There was only one part that I had to read over a few times ...

Good start! You have a nice way of describing things and that is definitely your strong suit when it comes to writing. However, a lot of the description needs to ...

Hi! I'm also new to YWS. I thought your story was a good start as well. I liked that as a reader I was pulled right into the action, a ...