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Thank you for you suggestions and i know my grammar and spelling is far from the greatest. But as far as the repetition goes many great poems have this to ...

I'm not sure I understand your comment???

Oh okay thanks. I like books that hook you from the get go, so that's what I write.

I think this is one of the best short stories I have read. You have talent! I think its because you can connect with people in your writing everyone can ...

fix spelling and grammar..... lighten up on the discription a bit... get somthing close to Microsoft Office......go to for names...... can you tell me how you find it cheesy? So ...

I am changing the main girls first name and open to any ideas for it, but needs to be one of a kind.