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@ Chocoholic, thank you! Alej is the Alejandro mentioned in the beginning, would it make more sense if I kept his name as Alejandro throughout? @ Clograbby, I really appreciate ...

I don't think it's possible to critique five words, but I have to say, I LOVE this and I don't think you should lengthen it because that would totally defeat ...

Clearly I am indecisive, and bad at titles. If anyone has any suggestions for a better title, do please tell me, it’s killing me. I want this sucker to be ...

Awwww, that's so cute! I love that idea. Couple small points: I manage to catch only a fleeting glimpse of my target before the blindfold is pulled over my eyes ...

Hello Amy! MYPer! Are you planning on doing full IB? -points to self- Masochistic, jaded, burnt-out youngster who just finished Year Two here. I don't know much about YWS myself, ...

You've got a good start. You've got interesting characters and a lot of conflict. I'd work on punctuation, though. I'm critiquing as I read, so I might bring up some ...

Thank you both for your reviews! Now that I think about it, this was really only written as a, "Logs piss me off, maybe they will piss me off less ...

First completed poem since grade 7. Go ahead, rip it apart =) “Log6 + Log8?” This is our language of cut threads and slipped loops and willing violation. “Log48.” “Lies.” ...

Hello, my name is Rigel and I am a complete and utter whore. Sorry. Blame mom.

I'm glad it helped! It's up to you whether you tell here, but maybe a quick mention of so-and-so character's eye or hair colour - not the full description - ...

Resurrecting an old thread. Kelnor had first seen them while he was perched on a hill overlooking the meadow below. Was Kelnor daydreaming? Looking out for danger? Watching bunnies frolic? ...

I love the title! I really like your premise, I just think it'd be a much stronger story if you fleshed it out more. I looked blankly at the medical ...

I'm Jasmine and I'll be 17 in a couple days. I'm Canadian, so I love snow and hockey. When I'm not writing or playing/watching/thinking hockey, you'll find me wandering around ...