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Thanks Stella! This isn't the actual end of the first chapter but I got the feeling that it was too long so this is all I put up. :) Thanks ...

Hi I'm Tori. I have to agree with Smiley and Merlin. People down just start making out right after they meet and I've never met a guy who just walks ...

Hi Jared! All in all this story is really good so far. I like the story line and it makes me wonder what's going to happen next. A couple of ...

Note: The title will probably change. I'm not really liking it that much but I couldn't think of anything else. :D Jake looked out over the street. It was the ...

Chapter 1 Suddenly it hit me, Andy was gone. Andy was gone and he was never coming back. I heard someone say that they were sorry. I nodded without looking ...

The night was warm against my bare skin and the breeze that blew had the smell of sweet lilac on its breath. I love this sentence. The descrition is beautiful. ...

She nodded. He reached down and pulled her up What are they in the water or on the beach? Are they sitting or standing? I'm not sure and can't see ...

I think that it's a good start. I could relate becuase my cousin has a degree in Computers and works for the military. His mohter didn't want him to go ...

Hey Please tell me what you think about it! Be Harsh I need to know because I want to show my friends and I want to know what you guys ...

Name: Elizabeth (Liz or Liza but never Lizzie or Beth) Winchester Sex: Female Race: White Ancestry: A small town in Pennsylvania Hair: Mousy Brown Eyes: Large Hazel eyes Smile: Rarely ...

Does it count that have never been able to get through the book? If it does then definetly Lord of the Rings. It is so overwritten. It takes like 30 ...

It's so sad. :( I love it! I can feel the emotion in the pages. I can see the scene playing out in my head. I can't wait for more! ...

I thought that it was wonderful. Unlike some of the earlier posts I thought that the perfect amount of information was given away in the prologue. It made me really ...

Hey I'm Tori. I'm writing a young adult novel. My main character's name is Bella and I think that I should change it because of all the hype about Twilgiht ...

Hey I'm Tori! I'm 14 and I love music. I play piano, bassoon, clairnet, flute, and I'm learning to play guitar. I love to sing, act, and dance. I also ...