tonytwo

nonono you got it wrong, i did not say it was bad. Just "I" myself couldn't keep up with it.

lol i got lost wayyyyyyy in the begining.

plot twist

Yeah, that is how it is more or less. It was not necessarily a gameboy color but it was a description of the boy himself. But you got the rest ...

thank you, i have noticed the lack of comedy here.

it has a jokey tune because thats what limericks are, a nonsense tune.

thank you

Thank you, i did not notice that untill now.

Not bad, but the rhythm of what you gave me would not fit as well with everything else.

I thought it was a pretty interesting story, the beginning was a little dull but it got a bit better. I think you should probably improve the beginning portions to ...