tommyknocker

Hi. Thanks for this story. I especially liked the start. Really good! However, at the start of the middle section. This slightly confused me. Perhaps it was the sudden change ...

Hello there! I think that this is really good solid story. I agree with Azila, this is very good for young children. Really sweet and full of fun, (if the ...

Hi. I don't know what the Canadian Women's Suffrage is either. Suppose that has something to do with me being half a world away. Anyhow, i think this has potential. ...

Ah, yes. The classic step mother story. This reminds me about a C.S.I episode i watched last night. I think the use of a disgruntled child, coupled with a step ...

Hi, I'd just lie to say how much i thoroughly enjoyed this story and in no parts was it boring. However, i feel that this could have some more description. ...

Okay, i enjoyed this story. However, i feel the main character is a tad strange. Why would you just walk over to a car, see that it was open and ...

Admittedly, I've never been a fan of stories about animals. But how wrong can one person be? I enjoyed it, and i actually felt sad for the cat. This reminds ...

I think this shows promise. But, i felt that it was very predictable. And... i dunno. That I've seen or heard or read this so many times before. I'm not ...

Hi. I just liked to say this is a interesting story. I liked the opening paragraph. Really grabbed my attention. Ahh...Whats a "Harvester." I'm guessing it's not a spud harvester ...

I'm assuming, that this is coming from very personal experience. However, reading through this i didn't feel any emotion at all. Elaborate on their deaths. Was it; murder, accident, illness ...

This is good, but quite short. But that doesn't make it a bad thing. My suggestion would be to describe your opponent, all i got is his big. Does he ...

Being a S.K fan, i could rattle off numerous movies that were absolute rubbish to the book. Nonetheless. IT, is my favorite book by him and i bought the movie ...

I think this story needs more direction. I disagree with Alice, i completely don't like the ramblings of this character. Also, when she talks about, "sex drugs and rock and ...

I agree with ziggiefred on this one. Try to incorporate actual speech into this piece it will make much better than it already is. Also add more about the glockenspiel, ...

Wow, i don't read many stories in 2nd person view and i guess it showed when i had to re-read this. Once i did, i began to understand. It is ...