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  • I really hope this is a better effort than my previous try. :smt002 I watch. I wait. I plot. I am patient. I am the hunter. I like to portray ...

    Sep 29, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: I Am The Hunter

    I watch. I wait. I plot. I am patient. I am the hunter. I like to portray myself as a highly skilled hunter. Like a tiger in a forest, shadowing ...

    Sep 29, 2011

  • Action/Adventure Short Stories
    Re: The Power of a Smile

    Hey there! I had the same assignment to do a couple of years ago. Bored to me death it did! Haha. Okay, this a nice piece of writing and I ...

    Sep 29, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: All that happened

    Hey. In your spoiler you say that it's short-short story. I've just commented on a much shorter story than yours! Anyhow, I feel this story does not go deep enough. ...

    Sep 29, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The Hole Of A Mind

    Hi there! Short but sweet piece you have here. But in future don't write stories of this length ALL the time. So anyway, I agree with both comments above. But ...

    Sep 29, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The painter

    Hi there! Welcome to YWS. I hope you enjoy it! But on to the story at hand. I agree with sargsauce. It ain't a story really, but just the author ...

    Sep 27, 2011

  • Action/Adventure Short Stories
    Re: Living in a Box

    Hi there! Okay, straight into my first impression. "Why end it here." I thought to myself after reading the last sentence. I assume I'm incorrect in saying, To me, It ...

    Sep 27, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Skeleton Dance

    Hi there! I must say I particularly enjoyed this piece! I really like the way how you wove the story around a tree with the narrator. Great job there as ...

    Sep 27, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The dark before the night

    Hi there! I enjoyed this, to a degree. I think this piece is in much need for some descriptive text. In such a short story, it wouldn't be too difficult ...

    Sep 21, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: One in Every Class

    Straight off, I agree with Jennya. It's fairly good, but it ain't brilliant. It has a good plot, so I commend you for that. But what it's lacking is a ...

    Sep 21, 2011

  • Historical Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Paper Plane

    Hi there! You have posted this in the "Historical Fiction" section. The story is obviously about love. I'm trying to get my mind around the basis of this being historical? ...

    Sep 21, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: The Boastful Koalas

    Hi there! First off I must say that this story made me smile. Particularly the part about the koalas being energetic, I just couldn't get that thought out of mind. ...

    Sep 20, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Trouble in the Air

    Hey. A short piece with dialogue is fine if done correctly. This has been done quite well. If but a bit cliche as Crescent has pointed it out. But there ...

    Sep 20, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Two Little Beautiful Girls

    Allen Paige never meant to lie when he said that he would only be away for ten minutes. He never meant to be dishonest when he hugged his two little ...

    Sep 20, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Broken and Reassembled.

    Hey there! For starters, your opening 5 words: "The sky was black as night...." To me this puzzled me and I had to stop immediately and begin writing...What I'm writing ...

    Sep 20, 2011


have u ever noticed how ugly rosy-lipped batfish r? and not like in the “aw ur so ugly ur cute” way that like opossums r — no they’re just hideously ugly beasts that should never have existed and r the epitome of evolution fails. the stupidity, blank look, head emptiness. they’re horrible n everyone who likes them r horrible too. they truly have the worst fan-base >:[
— Shady