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Hi, DarkRain, I see you're new around here, so welcome to YWS! Cars were zooming past me on my left as I looked up to the sky, rain hitting my ...

Hi! This is a pretty cute little story :D My master farms smelly orange spheres that they eat a lot. I can see what you were going for, they farm ...

Haha, I was reviewing Into Africa but was poking around a bit and saw this, I guess it's more appropriate if I look at the entire piece, no? I really ...

Bonjour, MMM! I get the feeling that this supposed to be a hardboiled-detective-noir piece, I'm not a fan of the genre in general nor do I really know the conventions, ...

Hello, Incognito! Okay, is this meant to be like a diary? The narrator is talking about what she is writing and so that seems like the format you were going ...

Hi! This is quite an interesting short piece, but it seems, to me at least, that the emphasis is sort of in the wrong place. As we read through this, ...

Hi there! I'm English, so if I make any silly mistakes that would be obvious to someone from the Philippines, please bear that in mind. You seem to have a ...

Hello there! I haven't read the pre-edited version, so apologies if I mention something that you were already aware of! I'm not quite sure what to think of your opening ...

Hi! :D I don't think I've seen you around before, so welcome to YWS! I'm Tinny and it's nice to meet you! Is the first section meant to be entirely ...

Hi! :D I'm just reviewing this as I read it, so I may end up picking up on something already mentioned, or end up repeating points a few times, sorry ...

Hi! :D sorry it took me a while to get to this, I've not been so well recently >>;; “Irena,” says Father. One of my pet hates is that structure, ...

Hi! Sorry it took me a while to get around to this, I've not been too well recently and haven't been on YWS at all @__@;; I've not read any ...

Hi! :D I don't think I've seen you around before, so welcome to YWS! Feel free to hop on over to the welcome forum and introduce yourself to everyone! But ...

Hi! :D Came a high pitched voice, from within the room. Nix the comma. The cloth was cast open, with a young man’s leg extended out from when he’d apparently ...

Hiii~ :D I totally didn't start reading this because it uses my initials >___> The formatting looks fine to me, it looks like you might be missing some italics on ...