timeless

1. 5 a.m. Early morning sunshine shafted through the badly boarded up slats where the workers used to sit and dine. Now, instead of the warm touch of humans in ...

Hi, Lil_Pau. First impressions of your poem: Short and sweet with a defined conclusion in a separate stanza - ticks the box for me! Brilliant metaphors and similes used here, ...

Preface This is the wrought iron gate where they enter the Chapel from the Alcove; this is the first sunlight I see when my eyes open from the darkness; and ...

Hi, ConfusingSillyLittleGirl. I found that the best part of your poem is the ending - the gradually diminishing lengths of lines is very effective, and the repetition of Strike me, ...

Hi, Nalyd. Your poem is ever so simple, with a repetitive structure, but it very cleverly conveys the under the weather emotions of the persona. I liked the consistency, and ...

Hi, VUZFEK. The title of the poem really intrigued me at first. Unfortunately, (not being deliberately mean, don't take this the wrong way please!) but the poem was a slight ...

Good morning, sunshine I’m feeling warm today and I think It’s got something to do with the Subtle glow of the faint words Which rest on the translucent screen I ...

Hi, erratik_statik. On first impressions, the language you use is perfectly suited to the tone of your poem. I especially loved this bit: Wishing, waiting, hoping, praying, dreaming of a ...

Hi, Explosive_Pen. Your poem is very nostalgic and dynamic in its own special way. I like it. *smiles* My comments are in bold: We walk on the narrow curb, Holding ...

I'd gladly take both, please. However, something about the thought of a perfect man climbing in through my window to carry me off to sleep is strangely appealing. Team Edward ...

Shauni: Dark brown hair with brushes of gold, five foot four ish, hazel eyes with a green tint, olive skin, pierced earlobes, likes to wear skinny jeans and bomber jackets. ...

Hi, LlamaDuck. Firstly, I loved the title of the poem! It's what drew me into reading the poem in the first place. The poem is full of simple and graceful ...

1. First Glance “Hello, Lucy. Come and take a seat,” said Ms Arden, motioning towards the piano stool with a thin wrist. I slowly walked in and put my rucksack ...

Oh, and I forgot - you get a gold star for writing such a fantastic poem! *smiles*

Hi, fragile_heart. I absolutely love this piece because of its sincerity; it speaks the truth straight from the depths of the heart. The language is simple and matter-of-fact, but conveys ...