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So, this is good but you still do seem to have a lot of awkward sentences. Were you in a rush? Sometimes writing in a rush is a good thing ...

Chapter 3 in full is up oh and I know I know a car attack but well its my little throw back to Agatha Christie who has one in most ...

it's just I think you need something really great to attract the readers, something to get them really fired up about the next chapter. *coco But the reader must be ...

Thanks both for the reviews. I will make the proper adjustments in due time as right now chapter 3 is on my mind and I want to stick my attention ...

Thanks all for the reviews and the views. wow 162 views in 4 days? Everyone must love my story :P?

Hi, thanks for the second review, busy atm with writing chapter 3 so I may reply bigger tomorrow but so far I wish to comment on these 2 . Okay, ...

Kindly edit this and press on the "story" button right next to special formatting so it can appear double spaced which is much easier to read thanks

Hi, sorry I read it yesterday but forgot to review. I'm not the best reviewer in punctuation etc Anyway Firstly I thought it was very good that you didn't' describe ...

Why not exactly? Could you possible split the first chapter in two and let the third chapter be what is now the second chapter? As is, this chapter is so ...

Yo, tigs. KD here to review! Let's start off first with formatting; I'll try not to repeat anything that anyone else said. I think this would be much nicer if ...

while just in the shower i came up with what im gonna do the first chapter will be called: just a regular day. the second is: and than it changes ...

And a quick question: How does her school uniform have a skull on it? Did she add that? Doesn't that defeat the purpose of a "uniform" uniform? Does this ever ...

Heya :) Here to review as requested! You've had some pretty good reviews here, especially from bear! I'm not going to give you an extremely thorough review, everyone else has ...

chapter bump :D

chapter bump :D