thisismichelled

Today my father died. Gone, he was here yesterday. Left me, my family. Not a note or goodbye. I walked down the street Counted each car on every one of ...

I really love the emotion in this piece. So powerful. With just a bit of editing (for grammar and such) it would be worthy of publishing! :)

I really like these lyrics! Great job :) I'd love to see more work from you :) Very pop.

I really love this piece :) I would say maybe clean up the last verse (not language wise it just seems a little too in your face) but overall a ...

This is such an amazing poem! I love it :) You are very talented, keep writing! I have nothing really critical to say, sorry.

A tear for the fights The farewell That last Sunday Sadness is near I felt so strongly for you And you for I A tear For the end Pain For ...

The beauty of the world Put into one being One person Not by looks Though that be true But by life Words Wisdom We all want What we can't have ...

I feel this as very strong and edgy, I agree it is rude. But it's to the point where I really like it. Great job :)

This is a great piece! I love the contrast between the two, and this might just be me, but it reminds me of the Greek Tale of Persephone. But a ...

I love this, the facial expression are wonderful and the color really gives off the personalities you describe :)

I like this poem and the subject matter. I think it is written well, save for the rhyming scheme. You need to decide if and where you will rhyme, maybe ...

I really like this piece, I would maybe look at the flow. I agree with the comma usage, I think if you edit that out it'll make the flow a ...