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Hey Dudette! I'm so sorry it took me this long to get to this... Life is a little bit packed for me lately, and well now that I'm pretty much ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with nitpicks and then go on with my overall impression of story. Very slowly the man lifted his hands to where the woman’s veil was ...

Hello there. :) This is an amazing piece you've written. I don't have much to say... You throw the vase your sister made for us at the blank of wall ...

Hello there. :) First for the nitpicks... Glitter box and Miracles already covered them, but there's one they didn't. The bus started to move and I couldn't take my eyes ...

Hello there. :) I'll begin with the nitpicks and the then go on with my overall impression on your story. Some of these goals – getting into her first choice ...

Hello there. :) I either need you there as a friend , or something else. And this is starting to sound really stupid period. :| Doesn't mean that if you ...

Hello there. :) I see you have punctuation mistakes, so I'll quote the whole thing to make it easier to correct. Chapter 1 I stopped in front of my aunt’s ...

Hello there. :) Your mother and I found out you were arriving at such a bad time, but it seemed to smooth things over like a band aid . I ...

Hello there. :) First off, make sure to space your story. It's really intense and not attractive to the eye when it's in a huge paragraph like right now. It's ...

Hello there. :) Sorry if it took me a while to get to this... It's been a crazy week. I'll go on with the review though. "It was whatever. I ...

Hello, I'm here again. :) It was always warm and cozy in there and they had tons of soft armchairs that were perfect were perfect for sinking into and getting ...

Hello there. :) He leaned down to touch the hands of over excited teenage girls, looking in their eyes. 'Their' doesn't take a 's'. :) A note that said, Meet ...

Hello Reagan, it's me again. ;) Sarah was always complaining about how I made things harder for her- *space* how I still do. Again, make sure you make a space. ...

Hello Dudette, I'm here once again. :) First off, I love the summary of the last chapter. I laughed when I read it. ;) I smiled when I spotted him ...

Hello Reagan, I'm here as requested. :) It had been a strange dream, I was sure of it- *space* frightening, too. Make a space between 'it 'and 'frightening', because it's ...