thelastofhisclan

Thanks,I'll work on this

My failures follow my footsteps; To try to stop them it's all I can do. They know where I've not been yet; Where ever I go they seem to go ...

Even though I'm right sometimes I know how to Walk fine lines Even though I may break through The seeds I plant Shake what's true So I may seem wise ...

Be warned, I'm a newb and my words may prove fruitless, useless, and lacking in fundamentals. None-the-less, here's my two-cents. Let’s hope that I have sense. I'm not quite sure ...

I love this, there were some parts that confused me but once I found out it was about martyrs, the parts the first confused me became my favorite lines. All ...

When It's hard trying to press on, Impossible going back; Give all you have to holding true, And do not let yourself slack. When you envy a vernal neighbor, 'Cause ...

Thanks all, Though that line "He don't follow me" was forced, the grammar I used was used on purpose, but looking back I see that it didn't portray what I ...

I love this, well done . . . please check my newest work out and critique . . . also check out some of my other works on my portfolio ...

I was made to fight I was bred for war. Help wrong lose to right Help... like those before. Not raised to blend in But taught to stand out . ...

I've lived mistakes and fed those takes to other fakes like me, but we're different you see... I'm Not Free ...I was made to die, the cobwebs overhead; I am ...

Yea I had that opinion too. I'm trying to redo some of the comparisons and the tree was definitely a turn off to me. When I first wrote it i ...

Dialogue Dialogue Dialogue Dialogue I don't know anything about writing stories haven't done it, but from reading other's works I find that dialogue is a great attention getter. Helps with ...

Thanks, I'm kind of new to this site and sites in general... I will definitely space between lines. I didn't think of that. Your comment was greatly appreciated :)

I've walked a path not well known I've fought wars others have sown. Some have made themselves heard, Most do not recall a word. I've seen the world's heroes cry, ...

I do not love you as a young lover does, passionately. To me you are not a flower, nor are you its fragrance. Your living is certainly never to be ...