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Hey I am going to review your work :D I don't think you need the word 'the' after around, it will flow better without it! I hear whispers around the ...

Hey I see no reviews..I'm gonna change that :D Damon is an interesting name! I like it! "Damon! Don't!" This starts off well I like the idea that an old ...

Hey I noticed that you have no reviews so I'm here :D I'm not sure the lay in wait makes sense I think you need to rephrase the end of ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D i really like this sentence it really gives you a feel of where your going with this! We betray to conquer, ...

Hey I am going to review your work I am not sure this sentence makes sense, the repetition of hopes does not work, I think you need to change the ...

Hey I am going to review your work:D I agree with soink here, it does sound like you haven't checked through, or used spell check, but here is the spellings ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D I'm not really sure this sentence makes sense, its the began comming bit, it stops the flow of the piece. People ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D Nice opening! I never liked my name. It stands for everything I hate, everything I’m ashamed of. I don't understand how ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D Hey I think this is good but I don't understand what grade she should be getting, or what she usually gets. ...

This book is one of the best of its time. It was clear, precise and went to the point, and the description is just immaculate. I read it for the ...

Hey Ktg :), I just want to say before I start that it's hard not to be hash - even if it is really good, because we are here to ...

Hey I am going to review your work today! Do you remember how you always said to me "Death is never sad, unless the person never lived."? I would get ...

Hey Kaedee Nice idea Spring was now just around the corner and following it the end of school. Nice opener, the metaphor works well Draco paced about in the Slytherin ...

Howdy stela I'm going to review your work :D My mother pulled me out of school for the rest of the week. She came up with a story so far ...

Howdy Newbornwriter xD I'm going to review your work today -Prologue Unlike normal families that pass down jewelry, I think you mean jewellery books, money, etc. The Halliwell passed down ...