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Hey this is good so far, but you have a few grammatical errors. I think it shoud be I sat outside after reading yet again another vampire book. I sat ...

Hey I am going to review your work. I think you should rephrase this to I was hope we could at least have been friends! I was hoping we could ...

Hey As everyone else has said this is really really offence to any other F.R.E.D poet contest entry but they have no chance of winning now. This flows really well, ...

This is a tribute to Martyn Waghorn. He is a Leicester City player, offically now. Before, he was on loan, we nearly missed buying him in the transfer market, but ...

Hello :) I am going to review your work. Firstly the title - I think it is really good, short, simple, and fits in well with the rest of the ...

This is another corrected version of a proglogue to a story that I started to write last year, but was submitted on my friends account. If there is a problem. ...

Hey I am going to review your work. First thing I noticed it is really short for a there more too it or is this the real thing? I think ...

Hey I am going to review your work :D Nice starter, but it doesn't flow to well so I think you need to rephrase it a little, it doesn't flow ...

Hey I'm going to review your work! :D Usually repetition so close together doesn't work but this really does, and a nice opening sentence :D Pain. Burning, searing pain crept ...

Hey, This is a really good idea! The use of the word layed does not quite flow, and it breaks up the first sentence, you need to put a stronger ...

Hey I'm going to review your work :D If the killer is going to kill Finnick anyway why does he need an explaination, why not just get it over with...are ...

Hey I'm going to review your work! Repetition, and pattern three included in one, this is a good idea, and really helps this piece to gain a setting! Don’t scream. ...

Hey I am going to review your work today! Nice name...Nazar..I am interested in how you first thought of this! Nazar roared in rage. I think you mean "You're imbecile!... ...

Hey, I am gonna review your work today :D She needs a capital letter! she cocked her head to watch her sister, Lucy, wake up in a panic from underneath ...

Hey I'm going to review your work! :D Nice opening, very interestin vocabulary 'twep'. I guess this is a teenager speaking? Cody, you ungrateful twerp! I think instead of head ...