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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Listen

    This is so beautiful! I'm such a sucker for anything about music, and you've done such a good job writing how music sounds, which is so difficult. I want to ...

    Jul 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Will Miss The Crows

    This is incredible. It captures almost everything I love about summer, which is a subject I've seriously been probing for a while now. Like the reviewer above said, you use ...

    Jul 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Death of The New Age

    While I can't pin-point exactly what this is about, I really love it. Unfortunately, I don't have much criticism to offer, which I know is really unhelpful, but I at ...

    Jul 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: .

    First of all, the writing itself is quite beautiful. Even though you changed it from poetry to prose, it's still very poetic, and it's lovely. However, plot-wise, it's very, very ...

    Jul 26, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: El Protetor.

    First off, the descriptions are lovely. They're very clear, but not tired or cliche. In particular, I'm in love with this phrase: "it had punched a hole clean through the ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Maybe, I'm a Pencil

    I don't know if this is what you were going for, but I think it's a sweet poem. The tone is almost child-like (in a good way, I mean, not ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Solving for X

    I agree with the first reviewer who said that you should sort out the formatting. I thing you could just delete the "prologue" and "chapter one" and it would be ...

    Jul 22, 2011


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