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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Listen

    This is so beautiful! I'm such a sucker for anything about music, and you've done such a good job writing how music sounds, which is so difficult. I want to ...

    Jul 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Will Miss The Crows

    This is incredible. It captures almost everything I love about summer, which is a subject I've seriously been probing for a while now. Like the reviewer above said, you use ...

    Jul 28, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Death of The New Age

    While I can't pin-point exactly what this is about, I really love it. Unfortunately, I don't have much criticism to offer, which I know is really unhelpful, but I at ...

    Jul 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: .

    First of all, the writing itself is quite beautiful. Even though you changed it from poetry to prose, it's still very poetic, and it's lovely. However, plot-wise, it's very, very ...

    Jul 26, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: El Protetor.

    First off, the descriptions are lovely. They're very clear, but not tired or cliche. In particular, I'm in love with this phrase: "it had punched a hole clean through the ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Maybe, I'm a Pencil

    I don't know if this is what you were going for, but I think it's a sweet poem. The tone is almost child-like (in a good way, I mean, not ...

    Jul 22, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Solving for X

    I agree with the first reviewer who said that you should sort out the formatting. I thing you could just delete the "prologue" and "chapter one" and it would be ...

    Jul 22, 2011


Perhaps when we find ourselves wanting everything, it is because we are dangerously close to wanting nothing.
— Sylvia Plath