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Re: Shaman's Blues
We will sing this together as we teach the words and learn the ritual Who is willing to give a fatherly role, on a walk to the beauty way. Chanting ...
Dec 5, 2008 -
Re: Of Lead
yes, yes, i daresay i very much enjoyed this piece. It somehow took me until the second read-through to understand the meaning, but its very evident now. You have several ...
Nov 5, 2008 -
Re: An Absence
Thanks alot for the reviews everyone. Here is what I took out of it. Please let me know what you think, and if you see more errors. Days have passed ...
Nov 4, 2008 -
Re: Ergo Sum's Sun
yeah man really powerful writing. I dig your style - which is clearly your own style, so i applaud you there. I dont think the punctuation has taken away anything, ...
Nov 3, 2008 -
Re: Forgotten Prayer
i agreed with some of the posts above. it was a very difficult poem to read. I'm not sure if it was becuase of the punctuation or lack of "doing" ...
Nov 3, 2008 -
Re: lunar wombs
ahh my friend adriangarcia you missed the point, you captured the beauty and mistook it for rubbage. How many frost poems are like this, or any of the great poets, ...
Oct 31, 2008 -
Re: River At Sunset.
I like the picture but it really should have some and cropping of the people. With photoshop you can easily darken the sky, and add blue to the ocean. Contrasting ...
Oct 22, 2008 -
Re: The Treefort
The Stranger Tuesday was quiet. Wednesday the same. I forget about Thursday. But Friday was loud - once again. Johnny started crying about his position in “the gang’s” tree fort ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: Life and War
I generally dislike punctuation alot however i feel as though this poem could benefit alot from it. An example is here Never know whats Around the bend Never know what ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: poetry my first try sorry if it is bad
Haha, yeah i agree with the two posts above me. Its pretty much not an attempt. But try breaking it up into line breaks and add more depth to it ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: Owens Allegory
Owen once told the earth the whole story, For his passing was soon to come. The stars, the trees, the grass and even the owls, Heard every last word. But ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: After Rain.
Wonderful poem, i'm having trouble finding the meaning but in my opinion the words are more than meaning here. The trees stripped bare by winter’s hands Rip the skies and ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: Danger like you.
Its a really solid poem, you dont have any sentences that really take down the whole piece. No weak parts which is excellent to see. It really reminds me of ...
Oct 21, 2008 -
Re: An Absence
Days have past and words have not been written. The world has turned and events occurred yet records have not been recorded. I sit here an invisible man as my ...
Oct 21, 2008
