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Secrets of the Trees Ch. 1 Betrayal “Ouch!” I cried out in pain, jumping back. Leaving out razors on the bathroom counter – bad idea. Blood oozed from my ring ...

Wow, great poem! Once change, probably a typo. "Adolescence." Like the poem, though! I like the second to last stanza a lot. ~Jamie

Eh, kind of choppy, like Vampy and Rickage said. Maybe you can change some of the words. "These feelings I say." This is an example of choppiness. Try to reword ...

The only correction I would make would be to give and take some of the punctuation there so the poem flows more smoothly. Other than that, great job! The poem ...

Punctuation would definitely make it flow better. Nice poem, by the way. I like the rhyming with run and sun at the end. Very neat. :) ~Jamie

Seems like a nice poem to me, but the rhyming scheme is all over the place: AABCCDEFA If you are going to make something rhyme, be sure it has a ...

Hi, there! Wow, I love the passion in this poem. I hope you'll do great in the contest. Here's my advice. I am a cursed one. Like flames that lick ...

Hi Anna! I'm new here, too. Call me Jamie, or, if you must, teenweirdo or TW. I prefer the actual name, though. :) Just joined a few days ago. Anyways, ...

Yay, so many warm welcomings! You guys are so nice. Ah, a second gift! How wonderful! :)

I use the computer. It's much faster than handwriting and somehow seems to flow more for me. It's also easier to edit on the computer and the writing is much ...

Her eyes Piercing through mine Glowing garnet with rage Menacing and condemning me Pitiless Her eyes Stabbing through my mind Torturing and tormenting it Scarring it permanently Agonizing Her eyes ...

mizz-iceburg - I like all three kinds of chocolates, but I prefer milk chocolate. The Twilight series is the best ever! Go Cullens! niteowl - I'll be sure to check ...

Your friend is a pretty good writer, but I would suggest some changes. I had friends, family, and a house, I was perfectly happy! Why did it have to go ...

Thanks everybody so much! Maybe - I like to read fantasy and vampire fiction for the most part. Things like the Twilight or Maximum Ride series. I listen to a ...

Hello! Right now, I am working on a novel called, "Secrets of the Trees." It's about the breaking-up of a girl's parents and the secret of her adoption and who ...