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I really like this poem, especially the repetition of the word, "jump". I also love the metaphors in this poem. It's really good! Happy writing!

Beautiful leaves of vibrant colors fall And swing in the wind with grace like a swan. They collect gently into piles so tall That the green grass is hidden on ...

I soon realized that I had learned three things that night. Three horrible, unanticipated things: 1. My parents had kept a startling secret from me: I was adopted. 2. My ...

Hi. I'm Jamie. You sound really nice. :D I play the piano, but the trumpet sounds like it would be more difficult to play.

Hello. My name is Jamie and I have just graduated from eighth grade and am going into high school. The strange thing is that I'm not nervous, but excited about ...

Right away it makes me think there's going to be a chaotic ruler or some sort of evil tyrant ruling the world. Secrets of the Trees

Haha. This is funny. 1. Does nothing happen in the first fifty pages? Are you talking about my novel? :shock: It starts with the action! 2. Is your main character ...

Thank you so much, guys! I really appreciate the critiquing and feedback. You just raised my mood one-hundred percent! :D :D :D :D :D Okay, now it's time for me ...

Bottle, bottle, Let loose the pressure. Free yourself, Your soul, your mind. Bottle, bottle, Twist off your cap. Pour out your contents, Your thoughts, yourself. Bottle, bottle, Speak your words. ...

Good job with sticking with a title. For my novel, I keep switching titles because so many of them seem to fit with my story even when I've plotted it ...

It's now about 5,000 words. Ugh. Not much progress.

Haha, funny little doodles. Pretty good. I like the blue monster with the bulging eyes on top of his head and the teeth coming out of his mouth. Haha. :D ...

Nice. By the way, thanks for critiquing my poem. :D "Girly." That's cute. The whole poem is so sweet. The one problem I see is that I don't think it ...

I really like this song, the lyrics mostly. The demo is kind of cool. It's okay. Definitely keep writing, though. More punctuation would be helpful, especially periods. That's my advice. ...

Umm... too short to be critiqued. It reminds me of a song my brother sang to me once. Haha. Never mind. Are you sure this isn't from a song? And ...