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Wow, this is thoroughly entertaining. You are quite a character. *Thumbs up*

Any feedback?

Thanks Ranger Hawk. Every reply helps and I will keep that in mind when I do the next part.

Thanks a lot for the reviews! I've changed the word "insistently" to "incessantly" as was the advice of Merlin34. It really does sound a lot better with that word changed, ...

Thanks!! Maybe I'm being too critical of my work. If you could, I'm posting something in action/adventure. It'd be great if you could review it. tRiCk

Honestly, I am not really satisfied with this intro at all and I may rewrite it. Thanks for the review. This gives me a lot of insight and makes me ...

Well, repost it quick or people will keep complaining on how small it is! :D

Thanks for the comment, Corey. Oh, I know it's kind of confusing at first. Its only the first chapter after all but I'm going to add more and then maybe ...

Wow!! I didn't end up reading that very last sentence runawaythoughts posted till you mentioned it. That is really messed up. He better learn some respect... or else--> :smt062 Don't ...

Thanks, Jared! :smt081

I don't want to be a bother or anything ------> :cry: But any comments you can give on my story will be great. Thank you for your time, Trick------> :smt110

I think when you said beautiful chocking purple flower, you may have meant beautiful "shocking" flower but other than that great job. This was a very unique story and a ...

Alright, cool. I am glad you guys like it so much! :)

Thank you guys. I am glad you like it. I know the first part is short and it isn't the complete chapter. I just wanted to post a little bit ...

Maybe the first paragraph should be a little longer. Sorry to be such a kill joy. I really like your work though. :) Trick