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Your description of the setting is great, but most everything else is described pretty vaguely. Like 200397 said, its good to keep the reader wonder. Most of it can be ...

That's okay. I almost did the same thing last night with my first attempt with a reply. We all have our moments. Just do as Saint Razorblade said--I think. I'm ...

A lot of the story sounds more like poetry than prose. I'm new here and don't really know what most of the sites' posts look like, but I can honestly ...