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  • Lyric Poetry Re: This is what you'll never see...

    My body is covered in the pain I've had to endure. But my soul carries so much more then you'll ever see. Shredded and torn beyond fixation, my tattered soul ...

    Dec 18, 2011
  • Romantic Novels Re: Fakebook- Introduction

    Hiya, I'm here, as requested :) This is a very good start, I think. Obviously there are some mistakes you need to go backand review, as theotherone and murtuza have ...

    Dec 18, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Leave me broken hearted, by the sideline, wondering why.

    It all started it sixth grade, we became the best of friends. You were the one I'd always go to, Even back then I loved you. Then we grew apart, ...

    Oct 4, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Rather lie here and cry.

    Hai there I did enjoy this, and I can really relate to it, which is always a great compliment for any literary work. There are a few mistakes though, that ...

    Oct 4, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: I Wanted to Change My Name

    Hai there! I really liked your poem. It was very well written and I loved loved loved the idea. It flowed very well and it kept my attention throught the ...

    Oct 2, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: I'll Wait for You

    Hai there :D So first off, I'd like to say I enjoyed this for the most part. It had a great idea, although I think I should point a few ...

    Oct 2, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Forget Me Not(prologue)

    At first I thought I'd imagined it. The flash of anger, the blur coming at me from the corner of my eye. The sting where his open hand collided with ...

    Sep 29, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Mind Games

    I really liked how you conveyed the wars that everyone has in their minds. I usually do not like rhyming poetry but you did a good job with it here. ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: the dance of death

    thanks(:

    Jul 14, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I walk alone

    thanks, and I actaully hadn't thought about the greenday similarities, but you're right. I'm glad you liked it!(:

    Jul 10, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I walk alone

    thanks(: I have more work similar to this in my portfolio if you'd like to take a look.

    Jul 9, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I walk alone

    I walk through the abandoned streets of a sleeping city, it's dark grime coating me, and seeping through my skin. I walk through the storm of others tears, Clouds of ...

    Jul 9, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Ballad of a twisted mind. :)

    Hi there! First off, I really liked this, it was very deep and, of course, twisted, but you didn't over do it and it is very well written. I usually ...

    Jul 9, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Rose Petal Liquid

    Hi there! I really enjoyed this, it was very well written and the emotion was clear throughout the whole thing. This is a bit nit-picky, but I couldn't find anything ...

    Jul 8, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lies.

    Hi there! I really enjoyed this, but the flow was a bit choppy in places. If you go back and put some puntuation in a few places it will read ...

    Jul 8, 2011


Edna began to feel like one who awakens gradually out of a dream, a delicious, grotesque, impossible dream, to feel again the realities pressing into her soul.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening