summergrl13

This is really cute! I enjoyed this, and it kind of made me picture this as a children's book. I could imagine pictures to go with this as sort of ...

Wow. This blew me out of the water. It sheds some light on the destruction and truth of war. I don't have much to criticize individually, as it's pretty grammatically ...

I liked this, it was, if you don't mind me saying so, cute. It was different from most of the somber stories I see on here. "YES, a girl and ...

Great poem! I think you did a great job putting your feelings into words. "I could wrap you up with what I feel." I love this line! It makes me ...

Hello there! Just want to start off by saying this is a good little poem. I like the emotions behind it, it felt raw and honest. [Your caring hand that ...

Hi Maisie :D Summer here, your first official reviewer ;) might I say you have a very good story line, and I look forward to seeing more :D now on ...

Hi :D I'm just gonna be brief because there really is only one issue: it's unoriginal and only a few words have been changed around. People only have to read ...

Hi Zohali! Just here to critique :) if you'd like anything else critiqued just ask, and I'd appreciate it if you checked out/ critiqued my own novel in return (no ...

Hello Xyra! First off, I'd like to say that I thoroughly enjoy your story line, and I think that if we tweak and revise it, it will go from being ...

Very good story line. I enjoy the characters, I can tell there will be some character development in the future. Although I agree with Wicki on the imagery thing. If ...

So I liked this, however it needs a bit more editing, and I believe if you made a few changes you can change a good work into a superb one. ...

Basically, I liked it. It has a lot of potential, but I didn't completely feel the emotion in the piece. You need to put yourself in the piece a little ...

Wow, ummm, this is really weird. I mean, no offence, but if it didn't say Forks, Washington and the titale wasn't Edward and Bella, I wouldn't think that it was ...

Hey again! First, it seems like the stanzas are not as organized as most poems, and should be a little less run-on. Again, break it up a little, but you ...

Hey Vernon! Very nice by thway, loved it! Okay, I think I noticed only a couple punctuation errors, firstly. Secondly, I'd break up the poem up into several paragraphs, just ...