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Re: Daydreaming of Imperfection
Hey guys! Thanks so much for the review. I guess this poem constitutes a little explanation. First off, the bold was COMPLETELY unintentional. It doesn't even show up on mine, ...
May 30, 2010 -
Re: Daydreaming of Imperfection
I wash my mouth with Windex windows, day dreaming of head lights-shattering in the hills like honey flavored fireflies. I paint you with an etch-a-sketch, coloring in your cheeks with ...
May 25, 2010 -
Re: Todays the day for killing. (not as depressing as it sounds)
Today's the day for killing For blackened masks and sharpened knives Today's the day I'm barely breathing Not quite dead, almost alive We'll slowly crack open midnight And watch it ...
May 15, 2010 -
Re: 9 Reasons For Tomorrow
truthfully, no. i don't think very much about my poetry, I just let it flow out. But thank you, I'm glad it felt powerful to you
Apr 4, 2010 -
Re: Ordinary
Lets press ourlipstogether and watch the atmosphere catch fire burning the brightest green we've seen since the Hulk got angry. We can s/n/a/p the i c i c l e ...
Apr 3, 2010 -
Re: 9 Reasons For Tomorrow
1. Because the earth isn't spinning fast enough and I'm barely holding on to the soil dipping my toes in gorilla glue just to be safe to be attached to ...
Apr 3, 2010 -
Re: Shooting Stars
Okay. So everyone is totally going to hate me after this. I DO like it. Don't forget that. but here is my critique. "When is it easy? when are we ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: Stupid punk song x)
Some of it is really really good. I especially enjoyed the part about being a self indulgent hypocrite. On the other hand, while I know it's punk, it seems that ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: Choice
Allllllllllllllllllrighty. We all know that the idea is trite, but its trite because it's important enough for many authors to repeat. I think the best part is by far "Vibrations ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: Spellbound
Hmmmm. Well. I am not a professional, but I do go to a performing arts school, so I will tell you nothing but what my teachers have told me. "Poems ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: An Honest Manipulation
I have to turn this in so PLEASE PLEASE give me good honest criticism. I can take it. I really don't know where to go from here. So pretty pretty ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: A Meaningless Conversation
Hey. I really appreciate the feed back, but what about the execution would you change? I want to make it better, but I don't want to go tweaking the things ...
Feb 18, 2010 -
Re: Losing the Talent to Write
Hey. I just joined today so you don't need to listen to me at all, but I think as writers we are rarely satisfied with our work. I feel like ...
Feb 17, 2010 -
Re: A Meaningless Conversation
Your words play on your vocal chords Like a rope set Curling, sliding, climbing Up into your tangy mouth That tastes like one too many tic tacs- I'm glad you're ...
Feb 17, 2010
