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[ A/N : This is the updated version of my poem, "Ghost". If you want to view the old version, please PM me. I do hope this version is better. ...

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Mirorr The poison apple With a small bite in its crisp flesh, Beckons and entices With a spotless crimson lust A passion that, As red; as pure as it may ...

Alanis scrambles up the latter after her. Um... 'latter' should be 'ladder', as the many reviewers above had pointed out... She tiptoes to the edge of the top of the ...

You wouldn’t think that would so shallow would ever hurt so badly again. Um... do you mean, "...that wound so shallow"? Also, I think it would be better with: "You ...

[s]Hello... My name is Katie, and I'm a newbie~ I would very much want to be reviewed by you. :D Err, if you wouldn't mind, that is... :roll: Name: The ...

Oooookay. I understand your, err... self-loathing, but can you please, please pleeeease format your 'essay' properly? Seriously, it's too personal to be considered as a story. And another fact is ...

Good work... BUUUT... It's too short!! Waaa~n! I love a good, lengthy poem, and this definitely deserves to be lengthened, mind you~ Good grammar. Good sense. Nice piece. :D

Rawr. That's my first remark. Whether you take that as a good or bad statement depends on you entirely. Who am I if I never know love? If I roam ...

I'm... plainly speechless. I applaud your vivacity in creating descriptions. This is just wonderful! Like I said, I'm speechless. Nice piece. I especially loved: She lay before him, a waterfall ...

Hello... Katie here~ Alright, first things first: In the distance I heard a door close. They were getting closer. I had two men assigned to me. Redundancy is unsightly. Try, ...

Hello~ My name is Katie, and I'm here to, weeeeeeeell... Review your work! Dundundunnn... :) First off... Serenity opened her eyes to the bright ceiling, her head throbbing as a ...

What is this really about? To me, it made no sense at all. Why don't you try your hand at writing more refined stories? And oh, please refrain from using ...