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Have rewritten and updated Chapter 4, will implement changes to the rest of the manuscript shortly!

Thank you very much, I will definitely be taking your advice onboard. It is really helpful to have such a detailed critique!

Chapter 4 - NEWLY REWRITTEN! It was only when the boat began to fill with water that Chad registered that the hole he made with the harpoon was sinking it. ...

Chapter 3 It was breaking out. The creature was pounding at it wooden confinement and the chest would not survive much longer. The mirrors that studded the box one by ...

Chapter 2 The bus journey crawled by while Chad envisaged what might happen if he was caught. He considered his parents’ reactions, but even those would probably dwarfed by the ...

Chapter 1 Chad took one last look, before he turned tail and ran. He was sick to death of the torment, and as he ran he told himself stubbornly that ...

Prologue It was over, job done. He had the creature safely contained inside the chest and he had lugged it into the boat. Now, he could sit back and relax, ...

Anyone else want to post? I've been working on a complete rewrite of the first two chapters, and I'll put them up soon, but in the meantime if anyone could ...

I was thinking last night - I know my speech soudns bad but I'm not sure where to change it. Do you think you could highlight and particular parts where ...

Thank you very much for your quick reply! I don't know why it used that font, perhaps because I took it from my Mac at school. Anyway, I completely agree ...

Please note, only my second draft. Prologue It was over, job done. He had the creature safely contained inside the chest and he had lugged it into the boat. Now, ...

I'm new here, thirteen years old and love writing. I am currently working on a novel in my free time which is just a sort of hobby, and I will ...