storiesandsuch

Wowza, that was a long review... and it sounds like you've got some serious literary merit thing going on, which would be super helpful and awesome if this was a ...

Thanks for the reviews guys :D I'll see if I can't redo it without rhyme and add a little more punctuation in there

Aware of the weather A rise, yesterday But this morning is cold And cold it will stay Over my pathway In mid December A new sheet of ice That I ...

Grammar first :) It should be "Or the heavens ever deny the soul THEY save?" or you could do "Or heaven ever deny the soul it saves?" "Saphire" and "whishing" ...

I like the idea, but I think the actual statement could use a little rewording. I feel so lame for nitpicking at a one-liner -_-

We’d gone swimming in the waters until our skin mimicked raisins This was my absolute favorite :D I could be reading it wrong in my head, but something seems a ...

"My dear," Hell said, "come closer now," the virgin girl complied. He stained her skin like bloody rags in his lustful devil-eyes. First of all, that's just plain genius. AMAZING ...

There are a few things I want to nitpick at... First of all, the third stanza is the only one that doesn't rhyme. You could have it rhyme or avoid ...

I don't get very far Before running at the car I think I'm faster in this summer sun. My brother too, joins the race My head start versus his faster ...